Review and revise attached palindrome poem by addressing reviewer notes, write an another poem

Part 1:

Review and revise attached poem by addressing following review notes:

Note1: I like the imagery and smoothness of the first half and that it's a palindrome but I don't quite follow what is it about and I had a bit of trouble reading through the flipped version. It doesn't flow as nice as the first half.

Note 2 : I liked how well the first half was but then on the second half it kind gets jumbled up and I'm not it works correctly.

Note 3: I think this is a great start. That said, try to go toward the literal and then make an image afterward. As soon as the first line we already have a metaphor so I'm not sure what the footsteps of dawn are.

Please Note: Revision means deep and large-scale reorganization, creation, deletion, and other similar overhauls of the work. Surface level editing is not revision.

This is the stage of writing that involves rewriting or "re-seeing;" emphasis is place on examining sentence structure, word choice, voice, and organization of the piece. This stage involves checking for style and conventions–spelling, grammar, usage, and punctuation

Part 2:

Include a short 200 (minimum) word author note on the revision process for this piece, as well as the overall strengths, weaknesses, inspirations, and areas for growth you observe in this process.

Part 3:

Write another poem in different form (do not use palindrome, ghazal or sonnet form). Please make a note what form it is.