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Write a response that reflects on this week’s reading assignment. You may also include reflections about the assessment logs (the exercises that are part of your reading assignment) and/or the course lecture. I am looking for a thoughtful, well-written entry that demonstrates your individual perspective. The reflection must be a minimum of one paragraph to one page in length. The written reflection is due by Sunday.

Based on your experience with this course, and/or personal experience: What sound health topic, or topics, are you most interested in researching further? Please include both what and why.

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Smarthinking Tutor Response FormYour tutor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your tutor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] within your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking to help you improve your writing!Hello, Alexander! My name is Valerie L. and I’m a writing tutor. I look forward to working with you on this Extended Essay Review to improve your writing today. Let’s get started!*Writing Strength: Your sentences are often strong and compelling: “Racial and ethnic minorities are on the worst receiving end of the lacking health care for the chronically ill, hence the need to promote equality in the access of medical intervention.” This sentence, for instance, uses strong word choices and a professional tone to address a delicate topic. Well done!Main Idea/Thesis: Something missing from your introduction is a clear thesis that tells us what the purpose of your essay is and what you might be arguing. You do approach a thesis in the second paragraph by claiming that the deficiency exists in chronic care. However, it’s after the intro, which is a little late for such a thesis. It’s also incomplete, because you don’t explain how you’ll be proving that throughout the paper.A thesis statement both makes a provable claim and indicates how that claim will be proven. If you want to tighten the focus and inform your reader of your intentions, develop a thesis with both these traits that you can present in the introduction, usually as its last sentence.HERE is more on thesis statements. *Alexander 9502606 has requested that you respond to the Content Development:  You seem to introduce some ideas and not follow through. That turns the paper into more of a summary. for instance, when discussing the article, you mention that scientists argue they should be the ones deciding on the approach to ethics. Then, you simply abandon that discussion without talking about what that would entail or what reason was given for the scientists being the ideal group to deal with that challenge.Any time you introduce an idea like that, spend a moment discussing its implications or significance. This will allow the reader to see what you think, and give them the opportunity to know whether they agree. As it stands, I have no idea how I feel about the proposal regarding the scientists, because you haven’t given me any perspectives to consider.*Alexander 9502606 has requested that you respond to the Grammar & Mechanics: When a subject is plural but has a singular verb, that’s known as subject-verb disagreement. This usually arises from identifying the wrong word as the subject. Here’s an example: Innovations in medical sciences and technology has brought in added benefits and privileges that lacked before in the health care sector…Innovations is the subject, but you wouldn’t say “innovations has brought.” You’d want the plural verb form of “has.” What word would that be?It’s a good idea to double-check by identifying the correct subject in the sentence, asking yourself, “Who or what has performed the action?” Then you can more easily see whether it agrees with its verb.Summary of Next Steps: •    WritDiscussion Trustworthiness in Qualitative Research for Dr. Rocal,Management,,

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