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Before you begin…

For this assignment, you’ll need to turn in a job posting. It can come from FoxNet, the company’s website, or an external job posting site. Choose a job you’re actually interested in, whether an internship or a full time job for after graduation. Make sure the job is a good fit for your skills and strengths. You must turn in a hard copy of the job posting with your assignment.

Value Proposition Paragraph – 25 points

Evaluate and choose ONE experience with which you can highlight skills and experience required for the job you chose that makes you a good candidate. You’ll use that experience to argue your value proposition – that is, what you bring that can benefit the employer. Write one paragraph proposing that value that best relates to the needs of the employer. This paragraph needs to assert one specific experience you have, give evidence from that experience that proves you have skills and experience required for the job, and connect to why that skill can be of benefit to the employer. This paragraph will turn into an internal paragraph for your next writing assignment, writing a cover letter.

Here is a link to the Grading Rubric:

Important Writing Tips for your paragraph:

  1. Open with an assertive topic sentence.
    • Make the topic sentence of your paragraph a “road map” to the entire paragraph by asserting the experience you have and how it relates to what’s required for the job.
  2. Then make sure your evidence follows the road map.
    • Make sure you use a specific example – not two or three – and detail that example with data and specifics. Don’t just list job duties – make an argument and use results to prove it.
  3. Conclude with a statement that wraps up and highlights the importance of what you have proved.
    • Make sure that you connect your skill to how you can use it to benefit the employer.

Example Value Proposition Paragraph

For this example, the student is applying for a Charities and Community Relations internship with the Oklahoma City Thunder (NBA team). The job posting lists a few things that the student relates to in the paragraph, including assisting with special events and fundraisers, managing donations, being enthusiastic about working in a sports-related field, and having a background in community service.

I have a strong background in executing charity events from serving as my fraternity’s philanthropy chair. My role was to coordinate quarterly events benefitting the Children’s Hospital of Oklahoma University. My duties included booking the venue, food, and entertainment; marketing the event; managing the RSVP’s; delegating to and managing volunteers; and managing donations. Over eight events, I increased our fraternity’s participation and our annual total dollar amount donated by over 25%. My knowledge can help the Thunder organize events that will help both the team and local organizations in need.

Value Proposition Rubric F18
Criteria Ratings Pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeContent(10 points)
10.0 pts

Exemplary

Paragraph specifically matches the job advertisement and makes clear how your experience will benefit the employer. Paragraph uses detailed, relevant evidence to support the claim. Paragraph shows strong ability in analyzing and effectively addressing the needs of the assignment and intended audience.

 8.0 pts

Proficient

Paragraph shows awareness of the job advertisement and makes generally clear how your experience would benefit the employer. Paragraph uses largely detailed, relevant evidence to support the claim. Paragraph shows good ability in analyzing and appropriately addressing the needs of the assignment and intended audience.

 6.0 pts

Developing

Paragraph shows little awareness of the job advertisement and makes somewhat clear how your experience would benefit the employer. Paragraph uses little detailed, relevant evidence to support the claim. Paragraph shows general ability to analyze and appropriately address the needs of the assignment and intended audience.

 3.0 pts

Limited

Paragraph shows no awareness of the job advertisement and does not make clear how your experience would benefit the employer. Paragraph uses no relevant evidence to support the claim. Paragraph does not analyze and address the needs of the assignment and intended audience.

10.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeStructure(10 points)
10.0 pts

Exemplary

Immediately makes clear the key message and objective (i.e. a topic sentence that asserts the skills and/or experience you bring). Clearly establishes the appropriate context for why information is important – i.e. how your experience can benefit the employer. Key message(s) and/or argument(s) is/are focused and main points are clear. Paragraph is coherent, well sequenced and displays logical progression of thoughts/ideas. No topic drift. Student follows all assignment instructions.

 8.0 pts

Proficient

Makes clear the key message and objective (i.e. a topic sentence that asserts the skills and/or experience you bring). Generally establishes the appropriate context for why information is important – i.e. how your experience can benefit the employer. Key message(s) and/or argument(s) is/are generally focused and main points are generally clear. Paragraph is generally coherent, sequenced and shows a progression of thoughts/ideas. Minimal topic drift. Student follows most assignment instructions.

 6.0 pts

Developing

Makes somewhat clear the key message and objective (i.e. a topic sentence that asserts the skills and/or experience you bring). Somewhat establishes the appropriate context for why information is important – i.e. how your experience can benefit the employer. Key message(s) and/or argument(s) is/are somewhat focused and main points are somewhat clear. Paragraph is somewhat coherent, sequenced and shows little progress of thoughts/ideas. Paragraph drifts off topic at times. Student follows some assignment instructions.

 3.0 pts

Limited

Does not make immediately clear the key message and objective (i.e. a topic sentence that asserts the skills and/or experience you bring). Does not establish the appropriate context for why information is important – i.e. how your experience can benefit the employer. Key message(s) and/or argument(s) is/are unfocused and main points are not clear. Paragraph is not coherent and shows no progress of thoughts/ideas. Paragraph drifts off topic throughout. Student does not follow assignment instructions.

10.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeLanguageUse grammar & language checklist as a guide (5 points).
5.0 pts

Exemplary

Uses language that is concise and includes precise details. Jargon used strategically and appropriately. Demonstrates sophisticated awareness and use of grammar and written mechanics. Free of grammatical, spelling or punctuation errors.

 4.0 pts

Proficient

Uses language that is mostly concise and includes many, but not all, precise details. Jargon used appropriately. Adheres to most grammatical, spelling or punctuation rules. Contains few errors.

 3.0 pts

Developing

Uses language that is somewhat concise and includes some precise details. Jargon used somewhat appropriately. Adheres to some grammatical, spelling or punctuation rules. Contains some errors.

 1.0 pts

Limited

Uses language that is wordy and does not include precise details. Jargon is not used appropriately. Does not adhere to grammatical, spelling or punctuation rules. Contains many errors.

5.0 pts

Total Points: 25.0

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