i attached the file that you helped me and i changed a bit. professor said the paper is too emotional and there is not much evidence. each paragraph should have at least two sources. so here are what i want you to do.

1. for the background:

my professor said it is all irrelevant. she said the background should define campus carry/ concealed carry, provide statics (how many campus shootings have happened in the past few decades, how many deaths and injuries etc), and show what state laws are currently. i attached the example paper she uploaded for us to look. so please look at them and use the form.

2. each paragraph must have at least two references.

she recommend me some source that she want me to use. and she said the Johns hopkins university's source is good so i can use them in different body paragraph.

https://www.thetrace.org/2017/04/campus-carry-move…

http://www.ncsl.org/research/education/guns-on-cam…

3. the paper is too emotional, not logical.

it is too emotional for research paper. it is a research paper so it should be more logical than emotional.

4. in the rebuttal and third body paragraph, there is no evidence. again, there should be at least two evidence from background to rebuttal.

5. please write an effective conclusion.

it should restate the claim/thesis, summarize all main points (arguments, counter-argument, and rebuttal), and end it with some interesting final comments.

i know i am giving you short time but i liked you used only simple and easy word for my paper. so i really want you to help.

and when you use new references, please attach them as pdf file and highlight where you used. i attached tips for research papers and sample paper she uploaded for us.